Hey! First of all, you have an awesome title to your storybook! The fact that it lets you know that your storybook will be focused on princesses. This sparked my interest because I love fairy tales and have always been a sucker for a happy ending. However, your title shows that these princesses are angry, which has me wondering what happened to them to make them this way. I became intrigued and knew that there would probably be a little drama in your storybook and since I know fairy tales I am assuming they are angry because their prince might be lacking some charm. When I read your introduction I knew I was going to absolutely love your storybook. It think it is awesome that you are basing this off Mean Girls with Cinderella, Belle, and Jasmine joining together to create their very own burn book. Can’t wait to check in with your storybook later to here the stories these princesses have to tell!
I picked your storybook for my free choice because the title interested me, and I read through your introduction. The first paragraph to your introduction is definitely a hook to your story. It makes me wonder who these princesses are and why they have been forgotten. You do a good job of letting your reader know what the rest of your stories will be about, princesses whose stories are documented in the burn book. This story has a nice lead in to your very first tale. You do a good job of letting the reader know what they will be reading next, without giving away the plot of your story. I have no idea which folklores your stories are based off of, don't forget to clue your reader in to which princess folklores and mythologies are represented here. The burn book clearly was taken from Mean Girls, so you probably also want to include this in your works cited.
I love your intro! I laughed out loud when I read the part about the Burn Book, totally picturing Cinderella, Jasmine, and Belle sitting around pasting pictures and glitter into the Burn Book like they did on Mean Girls. (Did Jasmine's dad invent the Poptart? haha)
I also thought the way you chose to introduce your storybook was really enticing. Having it told from the perspective of a vindictive princess really makes me want to read more... the way you want to listen to gossip when you know you shouldn't, or watch a catty reality TV show. (I clicked "next," just to see if there was a story I might be able to read!)
One suggestion I would make would be to put the picture caption at the end of the page, or in parenthesis directly under the photo…only because I thought the part that said, “1. From Flikr User Steve Czajka” was the title of your first story at first.
And I noticed that when I read the introduction, then clicked “read more,” it took me to another page that also had the introduction on it…maybe that will change once you post a story there, but just wanted to make sure it wasn’t a glitch.
Hey Ali! Wow, what a killer intro for your stories! I was desperately hoping that somebody would do stories about princesses, and you have delivered. And on top of that doing it in the style of a burn book written by Belle, Cinderella, and Jasmine nonetheless! I will definitely be checking back in later in the semester to see what those girls are up to, so good job hooking me in! I think that as a whole you have set yourself up very well for the stories you plan on including. You gave a good explanation for why the princesses were ‘forgotten’ and why the cool princesses were talking about them. I also think that you did a good job presenting the basic concepts for the stories to follow. Like Chandler mentions, the “Read More” button just takes you to the introduction again, which I’m thinking is due to not having more to read quite yet! But might want to check that out, just in case. Good luck with the rest of your semester!
I chose your story for my free choice. I actually really like you're introduction. You can’t understand how excited I got when you mentioned The Burn Book. I love it so much and I now have such high expectations for your stories. A rewriting of princess stories with a Burn Book?! I’m already super excited for your stories! I am a bit disappointed that Jasmine is one of the mean girls though. When I was a kid, of all of the Disney princesses, I wanted to be Jasmine. I can’t wait to read all of the stories about these scandalous princesses. I am a little confused by your title though. You might want to explain it a little more. Are the stories forgotten and these princesses trying to retell the stories? I think it’s interesting that Cinderella, Belle and Jasmine are the “cool” princesses. I feel like you should elaborate more on the story of Cinderella, Belle, and Jasmine. In the introduction maybe tell more about their friendship and why they’re doing this burn book.
I clicked on your project because of the interesting title, and it was very interesting indeed! I liked the picture you used... it made it seem very mysterious and dangerous. I like how you incorporated this line into your introduction too: "...lead you into a whole new world". I don't know if it was intentional, but since you previously wrote "...Cinderella, Belle, and I (Jasmine)...." I thought that was a very clever way to reference the song in Disney's version of the tale. It was also very fun to read the last paragraph where you described the characters and their stories. I literally said "Wait, what?" out loud once I finished reading it, since I wanted more and didn't want it to end. It is a great way to build the anticipation (that is definitely high right now) to read your stories. Great job, and the site also looks great!
I chose your story as my free choice because of the title. It really captured my attention. I think about all girls likes to hear about princesses. I think it is interesting that you are doing it as a Burn Book like in Mean Girls. It really makes me wonder who are these forgotten princesses and what did they do to be in the book. The line "And we believe their stories must be heard once again, so that people will be reminded of how great the famous princesses are" makes me feel like the three princesses that are writing the book are trying to build themselves up by bringing others down. True Mean Girls style. I like that you gave a quick hint in the last paragraph of the princesses that are going to be covered. I am anxious to hear their stories. I truly look forward to reading more.
Your storybook looks so interesting that I am sad its not finished yet! I like the whole Mean Girl clique with Cinderella, Belle and Jasmine and of course the burn book. I think you should elaborate more on that and make it almost like you're gossiping about these forgotten princesses. You did mention how you (Jasmine) let the foul mouth girl into your circle before you saw her true self and I think that is so clever. I now want to read all the stories of the forgotten princesses because your introduction was very captivating, so I know you're going to have great stories in your storybook! Your title is so erie that it really draws people in. It seems like an unsolved murder mystery almost, like we are still looking for these forgotten princesses. Wonderful Introduction and I can't wait to see what you wrote for your stories!
Hi Ali! I chose your storybook as my free choice for this week. Your title mentioned forgotten princesses, and I immediately knew that I had to keep reading! What a hilarious introduction! I loved it! The part that made me laugh the most was when you introduced Cinderella, Bell, and Jasmine with their Burn Book. This was such an awesome reference to Mean Girls (if those were your intentions). I also liked how you foreshadowed pieces of the plot for each forgotten princess. Geese in a country club? Oh my! The way you depicted Jasmine's tone was priceless. She sounded shrewd and irritated. She's definitely on a mission to ruin someone's life. You know what I though was so annoying of the narrator? She made it sound like she did Aladdin a favor by marrying him when she mentioned that she married a peasant! How rude! I still love it though. I can't wait to read more of you stories! Your storybook will definitely be a nice comical read!
I was also drawn into reading your storybook because of the clever title you gave it. First of all, I really like the look and layout of your site. I think the colors match perfectly and it's so cool how you also made links to the other social media sites on the page. Your introduction page already flows so well, I would just suggest giving it another re-read to find some final grammar things to change.
What a great idea to tell these stories in the context of the Burn Book from the Mean Girls movie! I love that movie and I can't wait to see how your stories fit with the burn book style. All of the previews you gave for the full stories to come were really intriguing; I especially cant wait to read the story about the goose girl. Really good job so far, and I cant wait to check in on your storybook again.
Hey Ali! I love the title of your storybook, and think that it is really well laid out. The intro is great, I am really looking forward to reading more from from your storybook! As you continue to work on it and edit it, I think it has the potential to be really good.
I was actually a health and exercise major for a while too, so I can relate to you on that! It has a really interesting degree path that you can do a lot in the medical field with. Being a physical therapist would be such an exciting and fulfilling career too. I'm going on a trip during spring break too, we've almost made it! Some of my friends and I are going to the beach which should be a blast. I also am a dog lover, I had a golden retriever growing up. He was the best dog!
Hey Ali, i enjoyed reading your intro to your storybook. I think it was put together really well and laid out what you are going to write about. You can definitely tell it is going to be an interesting set of stories. I also liked the title of your storybook as well, like others have mentioned. I think it gives the storybook some suspense and makes people think what happened to the princesses. You did a really good job of foreshadowing and I loved the burn book part. The only time I have heard about burn book is the movie Mean Girls, which is absolutely hilarious and one of everyones favorite middle school movies. When you have stuff like that, it attracts the reader that much more and makes them want to keep reading. Overall you did a great job of making your storybook sound like its going to be really suspenseful, making people want to come back and read it once more is completed.
I am really surprise how unique your storybook front page was. You did such a wonderful job at creating the storybook page! I am really surprised and impressed. First of all, I like the subject that you are going to talk about! Angry princess! I wonder how many princess you are going to talk about and I wonder how bad they are going to be angry! I also wonder what they are going to be angry at! Such a interesting subject and I cannot wait to look through your storybook! I like how you made introduction to be link in one button I think that was super interesting! I like the picture of your choice! Of course it always starts with once upon a time when we are going to talk about princess! I think this would be a great storybook for sure! You did a wonderful job at creating such a unique and wonderful website, i mean storybook!
Hey Ali! The title of your storybook immediately caught my eye! I think your theme for your storybook is genius! I would have never though to write about forgotten princesses! So creative! Also I love how the original princesses that everyone knows created a “Burn Book” about them! That is so funny and automatically made me think of Mean Girls. I also like how they are all a part of a country club. It gives your storybook a modern setting and I think taking old tales and turning them into modern day ones is a really good key to captivating your audience! I like the layout of your storybook page. It is very simple and easy on the eyes! I wonder what pictures you will add to your stories! It’ll be interesting because there angry princesses are not familiar to anyone so it'll be fun to see how you portray them through images! Keep up the great work!
The title of your storybook really caught my eye and, at first glance, threw me off a little bit haha. The theme of your storybook is much different than any of the other storybooks I have looked at over this semester. It is obviously a change of topics, which is great. This will gives us something different to read about when it comes to the forgotten princesses. I think you gave the princesses a great, modern setting in the country club. There are probably many of us that think country club, but also think of the upper echelon of society, which would include princesses. Another thing that really caught my eye was the layout of your storybook, it is extremely unique and one of a kind! I am intrigued to see what pictures you add to your stories and how you portray each of the angry princesses though those images. Good luck!
Hey Ali! I really enjoyed reading your story about Goose-Girl. I felt bad that the other girls were so mean to her just for being a little different. It made me happy though when you decided to have one of her geese poop on Jasmine’s head! Speaking of geese… I wonder why she kept them with her all of the time? You did a really good job at keeping with the theme of the story being apart of a burn book. It was clear that Goose-Girl was messing with Jasmine’s love interest just like in Mean Girls. I also thought it was clever how you added in the whole rain part in reference to Karen from the movie. It was creative how you decided to have the princesses at a country club because often times people who attend country clubs are portrayed as snooty like Jasmine was! Overall I thought you did a great job on your story. It was entertaining and easy to read!
I really enjoy the color theme of your blogs. I think the birds you chose are very pretty. All your text is also very easy to read. It's simple but it works well.
Hey, I liked the music video that you added to your comment wall. I have never heard of this song or this band probably because I hardly ever listen to country music but I really liked the upbeat song and it put me in a good mood. The music video was fun too. I think I will explore this artist more.
Aliiiiiii! Hi once again! I came back to read your first story as my free choice for this week! It exceeded my expectations! I laughed so much as Jasmine's snootiness! Your story was well written and I loved how you portrayed Jasmine's thoughts. I thought goose-girl was really nice and down to earth! The fact that invited the country club staff as her guests made her a person that sees people as potential friends and not as a caste system. However, her geese following her everywhere is pretty weird, but to each their own. Oh man but whenever Jasmine witnessed goose-girl flirting with Aladdin, I could feel her rage! You did a great job at depicting the stereotypical wealthy-snobby people! I wonder if there will be a different narrator other than Jasmine, or do you plan to keep Jasmine as the main narrator? It would be cool to read Belle's point of view or even Cinderella's. I can't wait to read the rest of the story!
Hey again Ali! I had never heard of this band before and am glad to have found it! I like country music and loved their sound! Their music video was super cool and definitely suited their song and style. I love the photo on your comment wall, the cow is adorable! Also your colors are great for the look of your blog!
Hey Ali! I haven't heard of this band before but I actually recognized the girl skateboarder. She is a professional named Leticia Bufoni. The intro to the song made me think hat this was not going to be a country artist so that surprised me when they started to sing. I thought it was a good music video and song though! Good choice!
The title of your storybook is really attention-grabbing! I immediately wanted to read it because I wanted to learn more about the "forgotten princesses". You made such a great and interesting storybook topic choice! I was really excited to start going through it. Your introduction was really informative. I like that you made it seem like this book wasn't something that everything came across, but it's also something that everyone should read. I also like that you mention that they aren't the stories that we are used to hearing. I like that your first story is about the author's nemesis. It makes for a very interesting beginning! I like that the "country club" is such an important part to this storybook. It makes it all so interesting that it happens while they're out watching their husbands golf and kind of gossiping. I think you did a great job with your first story and I really enjoyed reading it!
Hi Ali! I just read your story Goose Girl for my free choice option this week! My first impression was really good because you used Tumblr instead of Blogger! I really liked that you did this because it helped break up the monotony of the same kind of layouts that Blogger has. Also, I’m an advertising major and just had to design my own website for job applications, so you could say I’m a little obsessed with fonts and website design right now. So, case in point, yours really interested me.
As for the story, I liked how you used the country club setting because I think it really embodies the whole idea of being exclusive since the club itself is exclusive in nature. Also, I think it helped the story make more sense since people understand this setting and some of the interactions that happen there. That being said, I was a little confused about what the story was about exactly. I get that they were excluding a woman because she was weird, had pet geese, and wanted to be friends with the wait staff. But I was confused how it all tied in together. Then, I got more confused after reading the author’s note because you mentioned so many different stories that had been tied into one. I think this could be easily cleared up but explaining the actual story you are pulling from more in-depth in the author’s note to give more context. Then, you could expand more into the changes you made and why you chose to make them!
I loved your storybook! A few years ago I actually read a sort of retelling of the goose girl story in a book with the same name by Shannon Hale! Since I was so familiar with the story, I though it was very interesting to see which parts of the story you decided to make your own. I really liked how you made the rest of the princesses so snobby! Goose girl never had a chance, especially with those geese! I think it would be really interesting to hear goose girl's side of things. I'm sure she wasn't actually flirting with Aladdin, but she should know better than to make it look suspicious! Jasmine can sure be nasty when she wants too! I also thought the style and layout of your storybook was really great; it made me focused and ready to read! I'm excited to read more of your storybook and see how it comes together!
Hey Ali! I really enjoyed the setup of your storybook! It reminded me of how it feels to actually read from a book. The structure and feel of it sent me back to my childhood when I would read fairy tales from the thick books and it would be printed in a manor that represented the older style books. I thought it looked classy and went well with the style. The thing that caught my attention the most was how different your made your story from the original one. I have never read the original one but from your author's note I can tell you made a lot of changes and the brought the characters to life in a way that made the story completely your own. I love that! There were just a few mistakes made in the sentence structure that made it slightly hard to understand what was happening but those are easy things to fix. I really enjoyed reading this story and I'm excited to see what else you have coming!
I just finished reading your first story about the Goode Girl and I really enjoyed all of the little changes you made to the original story. I wasn't familiar with the original version and reading your version seemed like it could have been the original because everything made so much sense! I laughed while reading a couple of the parts because the personalities of the girls writing the burn book really showed through. I like how you previewed in the beginning that she would be getting kicked out of the club because it kept me really interested to find out why should would be kicked out. Then in the end when I found out it was because he goose did the unspeakable I thought it was hilarious and I could picture all of this totally happening in a movie, even in Mean Girls. I cant wait to read you next stories, you chose a great writing style.
I chose yours storybook for my extra credit. I read your intro earlier and I wanted to check up on your storybook because I wanted to know how you were going to execute your burn book. I was also really like the Mean Girls theme. I love how petty the “Mean Girl” princesses are though. It’s really funny. I’m really enjoying reading the story "The Goose Girl" with the imagined mean girl voice with lots of likes. I will admit in the Mean Girls’ defense, I even side-eyed the geese having their own table. Okay so I will say you might want to double check your story. The second sentence was a bit oddly worded. But I’ve got to say, I loved your story. I really like that I had to guess who the princess was. I just found your story so amusing though and the mean girl petty-ness was perfect. I hope you keep up this tone for the rest of your stories.
I just finished reading your story about Goose Girl and I can say that I am not disappointed. I have never read the original story, so I know nothing about it. I really enjoy your Mean Girl theme you have going. I like how snooty the princesses are. I can totally picture them as rich snobs who think they are above everyone else. The thought of Goose Girl having all those geese following her around everywhere is funny. I loved how Jasmine got so angry over goose Girl flirting with Aladdin, although it seems as though it likely wasn't flirting at all. Goose Girl just seems like the type who can talk easily with anyone and her touching his arm was likely just casual. But I can see where Jasmine would misinterpret it. I hope to see the other princesses narrate as well. I am really enjoying your storybook and I will return to see it completed.
The story of the goose girl is so cute! I liked how you made Jasmine sound like such a princess in the way she was complaining and felt as if she was better (I like to think she's not really like that haha). The way you brought in other princesses into the story was hilarious. This sounds like its like I am a new member at this country club hearing all the drama that has happened there. Every princess loves their gossip! Even though they are talking about the goose girl in a negative way at least they are talking about her and she is not forgotten at all! Great Job! Keep it up!
I chose your storybook because I had read your first story before. I liked your Mean Girls theme which is why I chose your storybook. I read your new story, Princess of Pearls and I actually enjoyed it. I love how self-absorbed the mean girl princesses are. I like that you keep that theme with the stories. The girls steal pearls and it is somehow the Princess of Pearls fault. That’s just amusing to me. The Princess of Pearls is so clearly the innocent party in this but I love that the mean girls genuinely do not understand that. It’s all about their reputation. I’ve never read the story Toads and Diamonds but I actually really like the synopsis of the story. I actually like that you played up the jealously actually. I also want to point out that when I read your story, I picture the mean girl princesses with the voice of valley girls.
Hi Ali, I chose your Storybook because the title seemed really interesting to me. Who wouldn't want to read about the forgotten princesses?! I also love how you chose to set up your Storybook site on Tumblr instead of on Google. I think it definitely makes your Storybook stand out from a lot of our other fellow students'. I also like how on your Storybook brings you to a page with an image and that you can click on the Introduction and the stories from there. I also LOVE how you based that site off of Mean Girls---I was practically cracking up reading your Introduction and the goose girl story!! I like how you were able to incorporate part of Mean Girls into your Storybook, but you were still able to stick with the meaning of your original story. Overall, great job and I look forward to reading more of your Storybook in the future!
Hi, I am back again! I just finished reading your stories on your storybook and they were great! I can definitely see the Mean Girls component in your story in the way you wrote the characters. The narrative is definitely something I can see one of the Plastics saying. It was quite fun to read, and the image went well with the stories. There were times where I got a bit confused, because it seemed like there were a few words missing, but I got the idea in the end. I am not sure if it was your intention, but the fonts for the two stories are different from each other. It is an easy way to differentiate whose story we are reading, but was a little disorienting at first. Great stories though!
Hey there, I am looking forward to reading your story! The picture of the “book cover” already has me excited, since it reminds me of the tv show, Once Upon A Time. Anywho, I am going to make my comments as I read your story.
As I said earlier, I am here to inform society about them once again. These are not the happy stories you are used to hearing. --- I’m glad these princesses have someone speaking up for them and prepared to tell their story. I kind of like the fact that the stories aren’t going to be “happy fairytale ending” type stories because I love a plot twist with a side of suspense.
Their horrid social graces have led us here. ---Hmm, maybe I spoke a little too soon. I originally thought that the princess were nice young ladies that went through something that caused the public to forget about their graceful presences, or something like that. But the above quote hints towards something else. “Horrid” as a descriptor is probably the polar opposite of what I originally had in mind.
This introduction is great; I’m definitely ready to read more about each of the princesses!
Hello, I’m back again for some more reading! I’m going to comment as I read your story. I noticed a small typo of some sort in the first sentence. I like to call her goose girl, and I have maybe it for so long I hardly remember her real name. The “and I have maybe it for so long” part is what caught my eye.
I would agree that it is her one redeeming quality, since it looks like gold.
---Well it sounds like she has one good thing going for her. She’ll need it since she’s so close to those geese.
Last year we had goose-girl banned from our country club. --- lol “goose-girl” *sigh*
Even Cindy’s mice are pushing it a little bit. --- Cindy, I like that nickname.
Her first mistake was making friends with the club staff. They are there to serve us, and making friends with them is like social suicide. She even invited us to a dinner party where the staff was in attendance as guests! Can you believe that? ---This actually makes me like her a lot more.
I had done nothing to deserve this monstrous being leaving a present for me in my beautiful hair! She knew I had just gotten my hair done too, and she purposefully wanted to ruin it! --- Now this is almost ground for an altercation. Miss lady is getting out of hang, now.
Great story! The way you wrote it made me feel as though I was reading an actual diary and that I was right there in the thick of things.
I just checked back in on your Forgotten but not gone princess storybook and I was excited to see that you had finished adding your stories! This evening I read the one called "Princess of Glass." I enjoyed this retelling because it was interesting to see it be told through Cinderella's eyes. Her little snarky comments about glass being her thing and the other girl calling her too many times made me laugh out loud. All of the dialogue was key in showing your character personalities like Cinderellas. I guess I'm glad that things worked out for Cindy and the glass princess for the most part. I will agree with you though that the father auctioning her off seemed a little deplorable. As I was reading I thought how typical of this mean girl to find one little flaw in her "friend" and blow it completely out of proportion. Really great job overall, hope to read the one about Pearls next time I get a chance!
Your idea for your storybook is great! The format/layout of the storybook is what I first immediately noticed. It seems so nice and easy to use and overall clean. I got very intrigued about the topic as well. You never really hear about the princesses that are bad people. The whole introduction was very mysterious and made me want to read more. I like the style you chose for it as kind of a tell all. You made the good princesses seem like they had been burdened with the bad princesses for quite some time. I thought you did a great job in the last paragraph by creating a lot of suspense about what the stories might be. Great job overall, I look forward to reading more.
Hahah I love your theme for your storybook! Mean Girls will always be such a great movie. I would have never really thought to put the princesses as the mean girls. Usually, people think of them as nice, gentle girls who happened to have something nice happen to them. I don't think I would make it in their friend group, but I probably would make it into the burn book! I loved all of your stories and keep up the great work!
Hey Ali! The last story in your project was so good! You did a great job at keeping with your theme of the princesses always finding something wrong with the new girl to step onto the scene. I liked that this story wasn’t as dramatic as the other’s, but it still had the drama the other two had! I wonder why the glass princess called and texted Cinderella so much… it did seem a little creepy! I liked that you brought the story into the present by adding certain things we do today for example instagramming pictures from vacations. It made the story more relatable and I thought it was funny! You did a great job at really making the story into your own and focusing on the cattiness of Cinderella instead of the entire Princess on the Glass Hill story. All of your stories fit your theme very well and flowed nicely! Great job!
I love the idea and creativity behind your storybook. The mix of the Disney princesses and Mean girls all playing out at a country club is such a funny and creative setting for your stories! And setting the princesses as forgotten is an interesting way to present them. Every girl wants to know about all the princesses so of course I felt the need to know about each of them! Also, you did a great job of incorporating little puns and details throughout that made me laugh. The goose girl story is absolutely hilarious! I work at a golf club and I’m picturing all of this playing out there. Like, “ma’am, you can’t bring your geese with you anymore.” I can only imagine how filthy the place would be with geese everywhere. So Jasmine totally has a point. The first person perspective of one girl talking about the other girls is really funny. Good job!
Your stories were really amusing, like I expected. I just really enjoy the mean girl tone of your stories. I read your last story today and I really enjoyed it as well. I picked yours as one of my favorite storybooks and I love that you’re #1. I really liked your last story. I’m glad you kept the pettiness of your story. I really loved the fact that in all of your stories your kind of critical of the behaviors of some of the other characters. The glass princesses’ dad really did basically give his daughter away. I also love the fact that the mean girl princesses are always the ones in the wrong. The fact that the mean girl princesses were SO determined they were in the right is fantastic. Cinderella goes to the Maldives without telling her friend even though they had plans and yet thinks she’s the one who is being mistreated is fantastic!
Ali, I really like the fact that you used Tumblr for your storybook! So far, I've only seen one other person in this class that used Tumblr for their storybook. Looking back, I wish that I would've used Tumblr instead of the basic google site. Also, the theme of your storybook is very interesting. Having "forgotten princesses" that no one knows about is such a creative idea. I read your introduction and your first story about goose-girl and it was pretty comical! I really like that you made Jasmine seem so snooty and the setting a country club. If the original princesses were real, I would imagine they would be snooty and rude like you described in your story. lol I haven't read the original story for goose-girl, but you really made the character fit into your story well! I hope to come back and read some more of your stories before the class is over with! Good luck on the rest of your semester!
Hi Ali! Congratulations on making the list as one of the best storybooks! How cool!
For my commenting this week, I read Princess of Pearls. I really enjoyed it, especially since I had read the original story as one of my readings a couple weeks ago. It was really cool being able to compare your story to my knowledge of the original. I must say, I liked your version better! You did a really good job maintaining the body of the story so that it was still recognizable while adding in a personal twist. I especially liked how you made the diction more colloquial and modern. I think it made the story easier to read. Also, I liked how you made the princesses really spunky. It made me laugh and definitely made the story more entertaining.
Great work! Good luck with dead week and the rest of finals!
Hey Ali! I really enjoyed reading your story called Princess of Pearls on your project page. You did a great job at keeping up with the whole mean girls theme with this story. I think it would be so cool to be able to have jewels and pearls come out of your mouth… I think I would want to use my special powers for good though and donate the to charity since I could always make more! It was clear in your story telling that the girls were jealous of her special talents. I can’t believe they went so far as to frame her for stealing just in hopes that she would get locked up forever and that her reputation would be messed up. They definitely don’t sound like the nicest group of girls to hang out with! I wonder why she was so upset when she found out that someone had taken some her pearls the next day when she could always make more if she wanted to! Overall it was a great story and I enjoyed reading it!
Hey Ali! I really enjoyed reading your storybook. This week I read the Princess of Pearls, and I really liked it. You did a great job keeping up the theme throughout the story. It was really cool to be able to compare what I know about the original to your story, and read it with that knowledge. The ending was wild, I did not expect it! I would not hang out with those girls, but, I guess that is the point! Altogether, your storybook is one of the better that I have read. You did a great job with developing your characters, and through this you made the story very interesting. The more I got to know your character, the more I enjoyed the story. You are a very good writer! I have enjoyed reading your stories, and good luck with your finals!
Hey Ali! First of all I just want to comment how much I love your style and the idea behind your Storybook. Each transition into the next story always made sense, plus everything was so easy to navigate. I also liked how easy it was to read your stories because of the layout of your blog. It was simple and clean! Second, I think your writing is great! It always flows well and I feel like you put a lot of thought into your storytelling. There is never any unnecessary writing. Every single word has a statement to make within the sentence. I loved reading through your story Princess of Glass. I’m a tiny bit of obsessed with Disney princesses, so I loved how you included all of the other princesses into the story. This is something my niece would love to read! Really awesome job on your Storybook! Enjoy your final days of the semester!
Ali, I came back and read your second story and third story, "Princess of Pearls" and "Princess of Glass." They were very interesting to say the least! I love how creative your stories in your storybook are! You've taken the characters from original stories, and made them fit perfectly into your storybook theme! I also love the whole "Burn Book" takeaway from Mean Girls. It definitely gives a modern twist to princesses that have been around a long time. I especially like how you molded each specific character's personality to fit into each story. For example, you took the princess of glass and made her into a stalking, nagging, annoying girl. Then you went back and said that is probably why her father wanted to get rid of her. So good job making up your own story, but also adding in pieces from the original story as well! Also, congratulations on being voted as one of the favorites in the class! You did a great job in your storybook and using Tumblr was also a definite plus! Overall, good job and good luck with the rest of your semester!
Hey! First of all, you have an awesome title to your storybook! The fact that it lets you know that your storybook will be focused on princesses. This sparked my interest because I love fairy tales and have always been a sucker for a happy ending. However, your title shows that these princesses are angry, which has me wondering what happened to them to make them this way. I became intrigued and knew that there would probably be a little drama in your storybook and since I know fairy tales I am assuming they are angry because their prince might be lacking some charm. When I read your introduction I knew I was going to absolutely love your storybook. It think it is awesome that you are basing this off Mean Girls with Cinderella, Belle, and Jasmine joining together to create their very own burn book. Can’t wait to check in with your storybook later to here the stories these princesses have to tell!
ReplyDeleteI picked your storybook for my free choice because the title interested me, and I read through your introduction. The first paragraph to your introduction is definitely a hook to your story. It makes me wonder who these princesses are and why they have been forgotten.
ReplyDeleteYou do a good job of letting your reader know what the rest of your stories will be about, princesses whose stories are documented in the burn book.
This story has a nice lead in to your very first tale. You do a good job of letting the reader know what they will be reading next, without giving away the plot of your story.
I have no idea which folklores your stories are based off of, don't forget to clue your reader in to which princess folklores and mythologies are represented here.
The burn book clearly was taken from Mean Girls, so you probably also want to include this in your works cited.
Hey Ali,
ReplyDeleteI love your intro! I laughed out loud when I read the part about the Burn Book, totally picturing Cinderella, Jasmine, and Belle sitting around pasting pictures and glitter into the Burn Book like they did on Mean Girls. (Did Jasmine's dad invent the Poptart? haha)
I also thought the way you chose to introduce your storybook was really enticing. Having it told from the perspective of a vindictive princess really makes me want to read more... the way you want to listen to gossip when you know you shouldn't, or watch a catty reality TV show. (I clicked "next," just to see if there was a story I might be able to read!)
One suggestion I would make would be to put the picture caption at the end of the page, or in parenthesis directly under the photo…only because I thought the part that said, “1. From Flikr User Steve Czajka” was the title of your first story at first.
And I noticed that when I read the introduction, then clicked “read more,” it took me to another page that also had the introduction on it…maybe that will change once you post a story there, but just wanted to make sure it wasn’t a glitch.
Hey Ali! Wow, what a killer intro for your stories! I was desperately hoping that somebody would do stories about princesses, and you have delivered. And on top of that doing it in the style of a burn book written by Belle, Cinderella, and Jasmine nonetheless! I will definitely be checking back in later in the semester to see what those girls are up to, so good job hooking me in!
ReplyDeleteI think that as a whole you have set yourself up very well for the stories you plan on including. You gave a good explanation for why the princesses were ‘forgotten’ and why the cool princesses were talking about them. I also think that you did a good job presenting the basic concepts for the stories to follow.
Like Chandler mentions, the “Read More” button just takes you to the introduction again, which I’m thinking is due to not having more to read quite yet! But might want to check that out, just in case.
Good luck with the rest of your semester!
I chose your story for my free choice. I actually really like you're introduction. You can’t understand how excited I got when you mentioned The Burn Book. I love it so much and I now have such high expectations for your stories. A rewriting of princess stories with a Burn Book?! I’m already super excited for your stories! I am a bit disappointed that Jasmine is one of the mean girls though. When I was a kid, of all of the Disney princesses, I wanted to be Jasmine. I can’t wait to read all of the stories about these scandalous princesses. I am a little confused by your title though. You might want to explain it a little more. Are the stories forgotten and these princesses trying to retell the stories? I think it’s interesting that Cinderella, Belle and Jasmine are the “cool” princesses. I feel like you should elaborate more on the story of Cinderella, Belle, and Jasmine. In the introduction maybe tell more about their friendship and why they’re doing this burn book.
ReplyDeleteI clicked on your project because of the interesting title, and it was very interesting indeed! I liked the picture you used... it made it seem very mysterious and dangerous. I like how you incorporated this line into your introduction too: "...lead you into a whole new world". I don't know if it was intentional, but since you previously wrote "...Cinderella, Belle, and I (Jasmine)...." I thought that was a very clever way to reference the song in Disney's version of the tale. It was also very fun to read the last paragraph where you described the characters and their stories. I literally said "Wait, what?" out loud once I finished reading it, since I wanted more and didn't want it to end. It is a great way to build the anticipation (that is definitely high right now) to read your stories. Great job, and the site also looks great!
ReplyDeleteI chose your story as my free choice because of the title. It really captured my attention. I think about all girls likes to hear about princesses. I think it is interesting that you are doing it as a Burn Book like in Mean Girls. It really makes me wonder who are these forgotten princesses and what did they do to be in the book. The line "And we believe their stories must be heard once again, so that people will be reminded of how great the famous princesses are" makes me feel like the three princesses that are writing the book are trying to build themselves up by bringing others down. True Mean Girls style. I like that you gave a quick hint in the last paragraph of the princesses that are going to be covered. I am anxious to hear their stories. I truly look forward to reading more.
ReplyDeleteYour storybook looks so interesting that I am sad its not finished yet! I like the whole Mean Girl clique with Cinderella, Belle and Jasmine and of course the burn book. I think you should elaborate more on that and make it almost like you're gossiping about these forgotten princesses. You did mention how you (Jasmine) let the foul mouth girl into your circle before you saw her true self and I think that is so clever. I now want to read all the stories of the forgotten princesses because your introduction was very captivating, so I know you're going to have great stories in your storybook! Your title is so erie that it really draws people in. It seems like an unsolved murder mystery almost, like we are still looking for these forgotten princesses. Wonderful Introduction and I can't wait to see what you wrote for your stories!
ReplyDeleteHi Ali! I chose your storybook as my free choice for this week. Your title mentioned forgotten princesses, and I immediately knew that I had to keep reading! What a hilarious introduction! I loved it! The part that made me laugh the most was when you introduced Cinderella, Bell, and Jasmine with their Burn Book. This was such an awesome reference to Mean Girls (if those were your intentions). I also liked how you foreshadowed pieces of the plot for each forgotten princess. Geese in a country club? Oh my! The way you depicted Jasmine's tone was priceless. She sounded shrewd and irritated. She's definitely on a mission to ruin someone's life. You know what I though was so annoying of the narrator? She made it sound like she did Aladdin a favor by marrying him when she mentioned that she married a peasant! How rude! I still love it though. I can't wait to read more of you stories! Your storybook will definitely be a nice comical read!
ReplyDeleteI was also drawn into reading your storybook because of the clever title you gave it. First of all, I really like the look and layout of your site. I think the colors match perfectly and it's so cool how you also made links to the other social media sites on the page. Your introduction page already flows so well, I would just suggest giving it another re-read to find some final grammar things to change.
ReplyDeleteWhat a great idea to tell these stories in the context of the Burn Book from the Mean Girls movie! I love that movie and I can't wait to see how your stories fit with the burn book style. All of the previews you gave for the full stories to come were really intriguing; I especially cant wait to read the story about the goose girl. Really good job so far, and I cant wait to check in on your storybook again.
Hey Ali! I love the title of your storybook, and think that it is really well laid out. The intro is great, I am really looking forward to reading more from from your storybook! As you continue to work on it and edit it, I think it has the potential to be really good.
ReplyDeleteI was actually a health and exercise major for a while too, so I can relate to you on that! It has a really interesting degree path that you can do a lot in the medical field with. Being a physical therapist would be such an exciting and fulfilling career too. I'm going on a trip during spring break too, we've almost made it! Some of my friends and I are going to the beach which should be a blast. I also am a dog lover, I had a golden retriever growing up. He was the best dog!
Hey Ali, i enjoyed reading your intro to your storybook. I think it was put together really well and laid out what you are going to write about. You can definitely tell it is going to be an interesting set of stories. I also liked the title of your storybook as well, like others have mentioned. I think it gives the storybook some suspense and makes people think what happened to the princesses. You did a really good job of foreshadowing and I loved the burn book part. The only time I have heard about burn book is the movie Mean Girls, which is absolutely hilarious and one of everyones favorite middle school movies. When you have stuff like that, it attracts the reader that much more and makes them want to keep reading. Overall you did a great job of making your storybook sound like its going to be really suspenseful, making people want to come back and read it once more is completed.
ReplyDeleteI am really surprise how unique your storybook front page was. You did such a wonderful job at creating the storybook page! I am really surprised and impressed. First of all, I like the subject that you are going to talk about! Angry princess! I wonder how many princess you are going to talk about and I wonder how bad they are going to be angry! I also wonder what they are going to be angry at! Such a interesting subject and I cannot wait to look through your storybook! I like how you made introduction to be link in one button I think that was super interesting! I like the picture of your choice! Of course it always starts with once upon a time when we are going to talk about princess! I think this would be a great storybook for sure! You did a wonderful job at creating such a unique and wonderful website, i mean storybook!
ReplyDeleteHey Ali! The title of your storybook immediately caught my eye! I think your theme for your storybook is genius! I would have never though to write about forgotten princesses! So creative! Also I love how the original princesses that everyone knows created a “Burn Book” about them! That is so funny and automatically made me think of Mean Girls. I also like how they are all a part of a country club. It gives your storybook a modern setting and I think taking old tales and turning them into modern day ones is a really good key to captivating your audience! I like the layout of your storybook page. It is very simple and easy on the eyes! I wonder what pictures you will add to your stories! It’ll be interesting because there angry princesses are not familiar to anyone so it'll be fun to see how you portray them through images! Keep up the great work!
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ReplyDeleteThe title of your storybook really caught my eye and, at first glance, threw me off a little bit haha. The theme of your storybook is much different than any of the other storybooks I have looked at over this semester. It is obviously a change of topics, which is great. This will gives us something different to read about when it comes to the forgotten princesses. I think you gave the princesses a great, modern setting in the country club. There are probably many of us that think country club, but also think of the upper echelon of society, which would include princesses. Another thing that really caught my eye was the layout of your storybook, it is extremely unique and one of a kind! I am intrigued to see what pictures you add to your stories and how you portray each of the angry princesses though those images. Good luck!
Hey Ali! I really enjoyed reading your story about Goose-Girl. I felt bad that the other girls were so mean to her just for being a little different. It made me happy though when you decided to have one of her geese poop on Jasmine’s head! Speaking of geese… I wonder why she kept them with her all of the time? You did a really good job at keeping with the theme of the story being apart of a burn book. It was clear that Goose-Girl was messing with Jasmine’s love interest just like in Mean Girls. I also thought it was clever how you added in the whole rain part in reference to Karen from the movie. It was creative how you decided to have the princesses at a country club because often times people who attend country clubs are portrayed as snooty like Jasmine was! Overall I thought you did a great job on your story. It was entertaining and easy to read!
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ReplyDeleteI really enjoy the color theme of your blogs. I think the birds you chose are very pretty. All your text is also very easy to read. It's simple but it works well.
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ReplyDeleteHey, I liked the music video that you added to your comment wall. I have never heard of this song or this band probably because I hardly ever listen to country music but I really liked the upbeat song and it put me in a good mood. The music video was fun too. I think I will explore this artist more.
ReplyDeleteAliiiiiii! Hi once again! I came back to read your first story as my free choice for this week! It exceeded my expectations! I laughed so much as Jasmine's snootiness! Your story was well written and I loved how you portrayed Jasmine's thoughts. I thought goose-girl was really nice and down to earth! The fact that invited the country club staff as her guests made her a person that sees people as potential friends and not as a caste system. However, her geese following her everywhere is pretty weird, but to each their own. Oh man but whenever Jasmine witnessed goose-girl flirting with Aladdin, I could feel her rage! You did a great job at depicting the stereotypical wealthy-snobby people! I wonder if there will be a different narrator other than Jasmine, or do you plan to keep Jasmine as the main narrator? It would be cool to read Belle's point of view or even Cinderella's. I can't wait to read the rest of the story!
ReplyDeleteHey again Ali! I had never heard of this band before and am glad to have found it! I like country music and loved their sound! Their music video was super cool and definitely suited their song and style. I love the photo on your comment wall, the cow is adorable! Also your colors are great for the look of your blog!
ReplyDeleteHey Ali! I haven't heard of this band before but I actually recognized the girl skateboarder. She is a professional named Leticia Bufoni. The intro to the song made me think hat this was not going to be a country artist so that surprised me when they started to sing. I thought it was a good music video and song though! Good choice!
ReplyDeleteThe title of your storybook is really attention-grabbing! I immediately wanted to read it because I wanted to learn more about the "forgotten princesses". You made such a great and interesting storybook topic choice! I was really excited to start going through it. Your introduction was really informative. I like that you made it seem like this book wasn't something that everything came across, but it's also something that everyone should read. I also like that you mention that they aren't the stories that we are used to hearing. I like that your first story is about the author's nemesis. It makes for a very interesting beginning! I like that the "country club" is such an important part to this storybook. It makes it all so interesting that it happens while they're out watching their husbands golf and kind of gossiping. I think you did a great job with your first story and I really enjoyed reading it!
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ReplyDeleteI just read your story Goose Girl for my free choice option this week! My first impression was really good because you used Tumblr instead of Blogger! I really liked that you did this because it helped break up the monotony of the same kind of layouts that Blogger has. Also, I’m an advertising major and just had to design my own website for job applications, so you could say I’m a little obsessed with fonts and website design right now. So, case in point, yours really interested me.
As for the story, I liked how you used the country club setting because I think it really embodies the whole idea of being exclusive since the club itself is exclusive in nature. Also, I think it helped the story make more sense since people understand this setting and some of the interactions that happen there. That being said, I was a little confused about what the story was about exactly. I get that they were excluding a woman because she was weird, had pet geese, and wanted to be friends with the wait staff. But I was confused how it all tied in together. Then, I got more confused after reading the author’s note because you mentioned so many different stories that had been tied into one. I think this could be easily cleared up but explaining the actual story you are pulling from more in-depth in the author’s note to give more context. Then, you could expand more into the changes you made and why you chose to make them!
I loved your storybook! A few years ago I actually read a sort of retelling of the goose girl story in a book with the same name by Shannon Hale! Since I was so familiar with the story, I though it was very interesting to see which parts of the story you decided to make your own. I really liked how you made the rest of the princesses so snobby! Goose girl never had a chance, especially with those geese! I think it would be really interesting to hear goose girl's side of things. I'm sure she wasn't actually flirting with Aladdin, but she should know better than to make it look suspicious! Jasmine can sure be nasty when she wants too! I also thought the style and layout of your storybook was really great; it made me focused and ready to read! I'm excited to read more of your storybook and see how it comes together!
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ReplyDeleteI really enjoyed the setup of your storybook! It reminded me of how it feels to actually read from a book. The structure and feel of it sent me back to my childhood when I would read fairy tales from the thick books and it would be printed in a manor that represented the older style books. I thought it looked classy and went well with the style.
The thing that caught my attention the most was how different your made your story from the original one. I have never read the original one but from your author's note I can tell you made a lot of changes and the brought the characters to life in a way that made the story completely your own. I love that!
There were just a few mistakes made in the sentence structure that made it slightly hard to understand what was happening but those are easy things to fix. I really enjoyed reading this story and I'm excited to see what else you have coming!
I just finished reading your first story about the Goode Girl and I really enjoyed all of the little changes you made to the original story. I wasn't familiar with the original version and reading your version seemed like it could have been the original because everything made so much sense! I laughed while reading a couple of the parts because the personalities of the girls writing the burn book really showed through. I like how you previewed in the beginning that she would be getting kicked out of the club because it kept me really interested to find out why should would be kicked out. Then in the end when I found out it was because he goose did the unspeakable I thought it was hilarious and I could picture all of this totally happening in a movie, even in Mean Girls. I cant wait to read you next stories, you chose a great writing style.
ReplyDeleteI chose yours storybook for my extra credit. I read your intro earlier and I wanted to check up on your storybook because I wanted to know how you were going to execute your burn book. I was also really like the Mean Girls theme. I love how petty the “Mean Girl” princesses are though. It’s really funny. I’m really enjoying reading the story "The Goose Girl" with the imagined mean girl voice with lots of likes. I will admit in the Mean Girls’ defense, I even side-eyed the geese having their own table. Okay so I will say you might want to double check your story. The second sentence was a bit oddly worded. But I’ve got to say, I loved your story. I really like that I had to guess who the princess was. I just found your story so amusing though and the mean girl petty-ness was perfect. I hope you keep up this tone for the rest of your stories.
ReplyDeleteI just finished reading your story about Goose Girl and I can say that I am not disappointed. I have never read the original story, so I know nothing about it. I really enjoy your Mean Girl theme you have going. I like how snooty the princesses are. I can totally picture them as rich snobs who think they are above everyone else. The thought of Goose Girl having all those geese following her around everywhere is funny. I loved how Jasmine got so angry over goose Girl flirting with Aladdin, although it seems as though it likely wasn't flirting at all. Goose Girl just seems like the type who can talk easily with anyone and her touching his arm was likely just casual. But I can see where Jasmine would misinterpret it. I hope to see the other princesses narrate as well. I am really enjoying your storybook and I will return to see it completed.
ReplyDeleteThe story of the goose girl is so cute! I liked how you made Jasmine sound like such a princess in the way she was complaining and felt as if she was better (I like to think she's not really like that haha). The way you brought in other princesses into the story was hilarious. This sounds like its like I am a new member at this country club hearing all the drama that has happened there. Every princess loves their gossip! Even though they are talking about the goose girl in a negative way at least they are talking about her and she is not forgotten at all! Great Job! Keep it up!
ReplyDeleteI chose your storybook because I had read your first story before. I liked your Mean Girls theme which is why I chose your storybook. I read your new story, Princess of Pearls and I actually enjoyed it. I love how self-absorbed the mean girl princesses are. I like that you keep that theme with the stories. The girls steal pearls and it is somehow the Princess of Pearls fault. That’s just amusing to me. The Princess of Pearls is so clearly the innocent party in this but I love that the mean girls genuinely do not understand that. It’s all about their reputation. I’ve never read the story Toads and Diamonds but I actually really like the synopsis of the story. I actually like that you played up the jealously actually. I also want to point out that when I read your story, I picture the mean girl princesses with the voice of valley girls.
ReplyDeleteHi Ali, I chose your Storybook because the title seemed really interesting to me. Who wouldn't want to read about the forgotten princesses?! I also love how you chose to set up your Storybook site on Tumblr instead of on Google. I think it definitely makes your Storybook stand out from a lot of our other fellow students'. I also like how on your Storybook brings you to a page with an image and that you can click on the Introduction and the stories from there. I also LOVE how you based that site off of Mean Girls---I was practically cracking up reading your Introduction and the goose girl story!! I like how you were able to incorporate part of Mean Girls into your Storybook, but you were still able to stick with the meaning of your original story. Overall, great job and I look forward to reading more of your Storybook in the future!
ReplyDeleteHi, I am back again! I just finished reading your stories on your storybook and they were great! I can definitely see the Mean Girls component in your story in the way you wrote the characters. The narrative is definitely something I can see one of the Plastics saying. It was quite fun to read, and the image went well with the stories. There were times where I got a bit confused, because it seemed like there were a few words missing, but I got the idea in the end. I am not sure if it was your intention, but the fonts for the two stories are different from each other. It is an easy way to differentiate whose story we are reading, but was a little disorienting at first. Great stories though!
ReplyDeleteHey there, I am looking forward to reading your story! The picture of the “book cover” already has me excited, since it reminds me of the tv show, Once Upon A Time. Anywho, I am going to make my comments as I read your story.
ReplyDeleteAs I said earlier, I am here to inform society about them once again. These are not the happy stories you are used to hearing.
--- I’m glad these princesses have someone speaking up for them and prepared to tell their story. I kind of like the fact that the stories aren’t going to be “happy fairytale ending” type stories because I love a plot twist with a side of suspense.
Their horrid social graces have led us here.
---Hmm, maybe I spoke a little too soon. I originally thought that the princess were nice young ladies that went through something that caused the public to forget about their graceful presences, or something like that. But the above quote hints towards something else. “Horrid” as a descriptor is probably the polar opposite of what I originally had in mind.
This introduction is great; I’m definitely ready to read more about each of the princesses!
Hello, I’m back again for some more reading!
ReplyDeleteI’m going to comment as I read your story.
I noticed a small typo of some sort in the first sentence. I like to call her goose girl, and I have maybe it for so long I hardly remember her real name. The “and I have maybe it for so long” part is what caught my eye.
I would agree that it is her one redeeming quality, since it looks like gold.
---Well it sounds like she has one good thing going for her. She’ll need it since she’s so close to those geese.
Last year we had goose-girl banned from our country club.
--- lol “goose-girl” *sigh*
Even Cindy’s mice are pushing it a little bit.
--- Cindy, I like that nickname.
Her first mistake was making friends with the club staff. They are there to serve us, and making friends with them is like social suicide. She even invited us to a dinner party where the staff was in attendance as guests! Can you believe that?
---This actually makes me like her a lot more.
I had done nothing to deserve this monstrous being leaving a present for me in my beautiful hair! She knew I had just gotten my hair done too, and she purposefully wanted to ruin it!
--- Now this is almost ground for an altercation. Miss lady is getting out of hang, now.
Great story! The way you wrote it made me feel as though I was reading an actual diary and that I was right there in the thick of things.
I just checked back in on your Forgotten but not gone princess storybook and I was excited to see that you had finished adding your stories! This evening I read the one called "Princess of Glass." I enjoyed this retelling because it was interesting to see it be told through Cinderella's eyes. Her little snarky comments about glass being her thing and the other girl calling her too many times made me laugh out loud. All of the dialogue was key in showing your character personalities like Cinderellas. I guess I'm glad that things worked out for Cindy and the glass princess for the most part. I will agree with you though that the father auctioning her off seemed a little deplorable. As I was reading I thought how typical of this mean girl to find one little flaw in her "friend" and blow it completely out of proportion. Really great job overall, hope to read the one about Pearls next time I get a chance!
ReplyDeleteYour idea for your storybook is great! The format/layout of the storybook is what I first immediately noticed. It seems so nice and easy to use and overall clean. I got very intrigued about the topic as well. You never really hear about the princesses that are bad people. The whole introduction was very mysterious and made me want to read more. I like the style you chose for it as kind of a tell all. You made the good princesses seem like they had been burdened with the bad princesses for quite some time. I thought you did a great job in the last paragraph by creating a lot of suspense about what the stories might be. Great job overall, I look forward to reading more.
ReplyDeleteHahah I love your theme for your storybook! Mean Girls will always be such a great movie. I would have never really thought to put the princesses as the mean girls. Usually, people think of them as nice, gentle girls who happened to have something nice happen to them. I don't think I would make it in their friend group, but I probably would make it into the burn book! I loved all of your stories and keep up the great work!
ReplyDeleteHey Ali! The last story in your project was so good! You did a great job at keeping with your theme of the princesses always finding something wrong with the new girl to step onto the scene. I liked that this story wasn’t as dramatic as the other’s, but it still had the drama the other two had! I wonder why the glass princess called and texted Cinderella so much… it did seem a little creepy! I liked that you brought the story into the present by adding certain things we do today for example instagramming pictures from vacations. It made the story more relatable and I thought it was funny! You did a great job at really making the story into your own and focusing on the cattiness of Cinderella instead of the entire Princess on the Glass Hill story. All of your stories fit your theme very well and flowed nicely! Great job!
ReplyDeleteI love the idea and creativity behind your storybook. The mix of the Disney princesses and Mean girls all playing out at a country club is such a funny and creative setting for your stories! And setting the princesses as forgotten is an interesting way to present them. Every girl wants to know about all the princesses so of course I felt the need to know about each of them! Also, you did a great job of incorporating little puns and details throughout that made me laugh.
ReplyDeleteThe goose girl story is absolutely hilarious! I work at a golf club and I’m picturing all of this playing out there. Like, “ma’am, you can’t bring your geese with you anymore.” I can only imagine how filthy the place would be with geese everywhere. So Jasmine totally has a point. The first person perspective of one girl talking about the other girls is really funny. Good job!
Your stories were really amusing, like I expected. I just really enjoy the mean girl tone of your stories. I read your last story today and I really enjoyed it as well. I picked yours as one of my favorite storybooks and I love that you’re #1. I really liked your last story. I’m glad you kept the pettiness of your story. I really loved the fact that in all of your stories your kind of critical of the behaviors of some of the other characters. The glass princesses’ dad really did basically give his daughter away. I also love the fact that the mean girl princesses are always the ones in the wrong. The fact that the mean girl princesses were SO determined they were in the right is fantastic. Cinderella goes to the Maldives without telling her friend even though they had plans and yet thinks she’s the one who is being mistreated is fantastic!
ReplyDeleteAli, I really like the fact that you used Tumblr for your storybook! So far, I've only seen one other person in this class that used Tumblr for their storybook. Looking back, I wish that I would've used Tumblr instead of the basic google site. Also, the theme of your storybook is very interesting. Having "forgotten princesses" that no one knows about is such a creative idea. I read your introduction and your first story about goose-girl and it was pretty comical! I really like that you made Jasmine seem so snooty and the setting a country club. If the original princesses were real, I would imagine they would be snooty and rude like you described in your story. lol I haven't read the original story for goose-girl, but you really made the character fit into your story well! I hope to come back and read some more of your stories before the class is over with! Good luck on the rest of your semester!
ReplyDeleteHi Ali! Congratulations on making the list as one of the best storybooks! How cool!
ReplyDeleteFor my commenting this week, I read Princess of Pearls. I really enjoyed it, especially since I had read the original story as one of my readings a couple weeks ago. It was really cool being able to compare your story to my knowledge of the original. I must say, I liked your version better! You did a really good job maintaining the body of the story so that it was still recognizable while adding in a personal twist. I especially liked how you made the diction more colloquial and modern. I think it made the story easier to read. Also, I liked how you made the princesses really spunky. It made me laugh and definitely made the story more entertaining.
Great work! Good luck with dead week and the rest of finals!
Hey Ali! I really enjoyed reading your story called Princess of Pearls on your project page. You did a great job at keeping up with the whole mean girls theme with this story. I think it would be so cool to be able to have jewels and pearls come out of your mouth… I think I would want to use my special powers for good though and donate the to charity since I could always make more! It was clear in your story telling that the girls were jealous of her special talents. I can’t believe they went so far as to frame her for stealing just in hopes that she would get locked up forever and that her reputation would be messed up. They definitely don’t sound like the nicest group of girls to hang out with! I wonder why she was so upset when she found out that someone had taken some her pearls the next day when she could always make more if she wanted to! Overall it was a great story and I enjoyed reading it!
ReplyDeleteHey Ali! I really enjoyed reading your storybook. This week I read the Princess of Pearls, and I really liked it. You did a great job keeping up the theme throughout the story. It was really cool to be able to compare what I know about the original to your story, and read it with that knowledge. The ending was wild, I did not expect it! I would not hang out with those girls, but, I guess that is the point! Altogether, your storybook is one of the better that I have read. You did a great job with developing your characters, and through this you made the story very interesting. The more I got to know your character, the more I enjoyed the story. You are a very good writer! I have enjoyed reading your stories, and good luck with your finals!
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ReplyDeleteFirst of all I just want to comment how much I love your style and the idea behind your Storybook. Each transition into the next story always made sense, plus everything was so easy to navigate. I also liked how easy it was to read your stories because of the layout of your blog. It was simple and clean!
Second, I think your writing is great! It always flows well and I feel like you put a lot of thought into your storytelling. There is never any unnecessary writing. Every single word has a statement to make within the sentence.
I loved reading through your story Princess of Glass. I’m a tiny bit of obsessed with Disney princesses, so I loved how you included all of the other princesses into the story. This is something my niece would love to read! Really awesome job on your Storybook! Enjoy your final days of the semester!
Ali, I came back and read your second story and third story, "Princess of Pearls" and "Princess of Glass." They were very interesting to say the least! I love how creative your stories in your storybook are! You've taken the characters from original stories, and made them fit perfectly into your storybook theme! I also love the whole "Burn Book" takeaway from Mean Girls. It definitely gives a modern twist to princesses that have been around a long time. I especially like how you molded each specific character's personality to fit into each story. For example, you took the princess of glass and made her into a stalking, nagging, annoying girl. Then you went back and said that is probably why her father wanted to get rid of her. So good job making up your own story, but also adding in pieces from the original story as well! Also, congratulations on being voted as one of the favorites in the class! You did a great job in your storybook and using Tumblr was also a definite plus! Overall, good job and good luck with the rest of your semester!
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